Thursday, July 21, 2011

Memory











This is the continuation of Alex and Kayla's story.  It picks up from when we last saw them in Life


The glistening blue-green waves made huge arcs and crashed against the shore releasing bubbly whitish foam.  Repeatedly.

Kayla's backdrop, as she stood, relaxed and graceful, wrapped in white, her black Canon Rebel XS in her hand.  She rested it on her shoulder, leaning her cheek against the lens that pointed towards him.

Portrait perfect. His Kayla.  A musician becoming photographer.

Her beautiful skin shone smooth milk chocolate.  Her brown eyes gazed lovingly at him.  A light wind lifted a lock of light brown hair and held it still in the air for a moment before releasing.

Her soft, flowy top fluttered around her like fragile butterfly wings.  Boho chic.  She held his gazed as she straightened up.

"Okay, Sir Hotness.  Strike a pose."

He was her subject while she dabbled in this new love.   The only one allowed to photograph him free of charge, much to his manager's chagrin.

He blushed and stood tall, posturing in fake sexiness.

"I've got 5 minutes, lady and then I'm needed back on set," he growled, a smile on his face.

Her laughter echoed through him, sending waves of pleasure.

Standing tall as a sentinel, she aimed her black Canon at him, one brown hand adjusting the lens.

"One of People's top 50 Sexiest Men.  Watch out."

Her smile, crooked sexy.  His heart melted.

She faded.



Alex opened his eyes and slowly turned his head, which still laid on Kayla's hand.

Reality - he thought as Kayla laid in the hospital bed.

She was still in the coma.  She looked peaceful - her eyes still closed.    It'd been two weeks since he heard her voice.    The doctors were still unsure but hopeful.  His agent was pressuring him to return to work.  He needed too.  He was under contract.  But he couldn't leave her.

Not yet.

Tears pushed forth from behind his eyes.  Stinging liquid down his cheeks.

He kissed her hand softly and laid his head down on it again.  He closed his eyes, reaching again for that memory.

For that comfort.


This piece is inspired by a prompt from The Red Dress Club which asks to write a short fiction or non-fiction piece inspired by any or all of the photo above. Word limit: 400 words



Concrit welcomed. 




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Wowsa! I loved the romance, the fun, the sexiness in the beginning.

This part -Her beautiful skin shone smooth milk chocolate. Her brown eyes gazed lovingly at him. A light wind lifted a lock of light brown hair and held it still in the air for a moment before releasing.- so poetic and lovely.

And then the sadness at the end?!

Well that just settles it. You must write more of their story! :)
1 reply · active 714 weeks ago
Galit -

The fact that you - mistress of details - noticed the details in this piece makes my heart soar with happiness. I wrote this piece with your TRDC post and plump blueberries in mind - a few of yours in particular. :-)

I believe you are right. I must write more of their story. I'm beginning to fall deeply in love with them now.
I love his dream and how much his love for her comes through. Now I need to go back and read more. :)
1 reply · active 714 weeks ago
Thanks! I was hoping to express his love for her through showing more and telling less ( a weakness of mine).
I'm new to the storyline, so I have to go back and read the first part, but I love the soothing nature of the atmosphere contrasted against the playful, teasing banter between them.

It was hard to slip into reality after that.
2 replies · active 714 weeks ago
Having traced this storyline all the way back, I find I did read the very first part, just not the second.

I've rectified that.
Thanks! I love the soothing nature of the beach. If it were up to me I'd set all my scenes on beaches. And that banter between Alex and Kayla has been fun to write.
I love this:

Her soft, flowy top fluttered around her like fragile butterfly wings.

It makes her seem so delicate, and then to see her in a coma at the end, well it brought tears to my eyes.

Beautiful job!
One catches on the oddest things. I just got a Cannon Rebel camera, so that was my first "ooh lookie!". More than that, though, I love the language here, and the transition from Alex's loving Kayla to his worrying about her.

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