Friday, January 21, 2011

So What's the News?

“So what’s the news?” he asked.

“The news?” I asked.

“Now don’t tell me you didn’t see the news last night? Or the night before last? It was all over the weekend edition.”

“You know, I hadn’t. Don’t watch it. But yeah, the Rev. Dr. Bridges."

“They thought it was a heart attack. But it came back to be murder."

“Now who would want to do a thing like that?”

“Huh, ho, the real question is ‘who wouldn’t want to do a thing like that?’”


“Yes, indeed. He had built up a bunch of little nay-sayers around here. Though eloquent in his preaching, he was militant in his actions.”


“Lauren’s been questioned.”

“Yeah, so have I.”

“Oh yeah? That’s right! You were here Friday night. I thought you leave at 6?”

“I do, but I was working on a report that night that kept me later.”

“Yeah. Well, you know Ed Lorton is a suspect.”

“Coach Lorton? Why?”

“Why not? After his scandal.”

“Well, after his scandal, you figure he’d want to lay low. I mean, like he needs more attention,”

“Yeah, but a desperate man will do a desperate thing. His entire 14 year career here as basketball coach of one of the most well known teams in New York City snuffed away in a matter of days.”

“Well, he did that to himself.”

“Well, not entirely. The Rev. Dr. Bridges hammered the nails into Lorch’s coffin to make it secure. Coach Lorton will never work with this team or in this city again, even after the investigation is over. Bridges made sure of that.”

This post is in response to a writing prompt over at Red Writing Hood.


  1. Are you a budding mystery writer, Melanie? Good read!

  2. One question: the speaker asked Now who would want to do a thing like that?” about the murder part BUT doesn't he also mention later he was questioned because he worked late?? Wouldn't there have been a mention in the interview that the death was suspicious?

    Or am I off the map here?

    Visiting from RDC

  3. Hi Carrie,

    The speaker was referring to the person doing the murder in opposed to the murder itself as well as referring to the Reverend's character. Like "who would want to murder a Reverend?"

    Hmmm...note to self to make that part a bit more clear.

    Thanks for stopping by!

  4. Souldipper,

    Thanks! I am an aspiring mystery writer as well as a HUGE mystery fan. Hope to be a published mystery writer someday. :-))

    Thanks for stopping by!

  5. I like!! I want to know if the Coach did it (though I dont think he did. Too obvious now.)

    Thanks for linking up so I could meet you!!!

  6. Awesome. You're really good at crafting dialogue.

  7. Stephanie,

    Thanks! Nice to meet you too. Thanks for stopping by! :-))

  8. Now I need to know who dun it! Way to get me hooked! :o)

    Here from TRDC!

  9. Blue Moon Girl,

    Thanks! I was hoping the dialogue would grab people and hook them in.

    Thanks for stopping by!


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